- sablestream.

[Nefeli]

"o.O I'm not sure how she could do that."
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Y'know, now that I think about it, I'm not so sure either. xD Changed.


"The others weren't playful? Or was Sablekit like Taz from Loony Toons?"
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lol, no.

"mm, but how would he tell that unless she had a sibling to fight with/push out of the way/be fierce to?"
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hm. I'll add another sibling.

[Ten]

So I'm guessing her father was some sort of egomaniac obsessed with creating an heir of some sort, to take up the anti-Clan cause? He might like Sable the best, but didn't he raise the other kits to be cons too?


"He had always wanted to have and raise a kit, but almost none of the she-cats he'd mated with had birthed kits that had his cunning and rebel spirit;"
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How did Sablekit express cunning and rebel spirit?

[Nefeli]

"So I'm guessing her father was some sort of egomaniac obsessed with creating an heir of some sort, to take up the anti-Clan cause? He might like Sable the best, but didn't he raise the other kits to be cons too?"
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Yes, he did. Added.

"How did Sablekit express cunning and rebel spirit?"
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... I'll have to get back to you on that one, gotta go to the gym.

[Nefeli]

"How did Sablekit express cunning and rebel spirit?"
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hm. When she was older, she showed great dislike towards Clanners. She also was a good hunter, using a cunning technique to hunt prey.

[Ten]

"When she was older, she showed great dislike towards Clanners."
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Which he taught her. So what?


"She also was a good hunter, using a cunning technique to hunt prey."
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What technique?

[Nefeli]

Ten, I changed a lot of her bio, so you might want to re-read it.

[Ten]

"She has dark teal green" <-- hyphenate


"One of her ears are" <-- is?


"The climate of her birth had a large impact on Sablestream's personality,"
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You're free to make a comparison between the two, but the weather on your birthday doesn't have a large impact on what you grow up to be like.


"suffix because her thought" <-- he thought?


"She was never very close to her mother Paleheart, for she did not like her mother's bossy, demanding ways."
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What did she demand of them?

[Nefeli]

Fixed the typos.

"You're free to make a comparison between the two, but the weather on your birthday doesn't have a large impact on what you grow up to be like."
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Okay, changed that.

"What did she demand of them?"
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I changed that.

[Ten]

I'd prefer it if you would tell me in your posts what you've changed it to, please.


"She grew up to be like the climate of her birth; quite like the storm, icy and indifferent."
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Was her mother icy and indifferent?


"for she did not like her mother's bossy, meddlesome ways."
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What did she meddle in?

[Nefeli]

Sure.

"Was her mother icy and indifferent?"
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I suppose. Added "like her mother."

EDIT|| changed to "like her father" because i wanted to.

"What did she meddle in?"
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...private stuff. My mom is like that too, now that I think about it. -checks for mom over shoulder-