Smallsun

[Leaf]

Role player| I'm Leaf, and also a bit new to the site... if you didn't know by never seeing me before.

Name| Smallsun

Gender| She-cat

Physical Description| Smallsun is well, small for a cat.
She has a short coat, and is a dark gold tabby with green eyes. On her underbelly the fur is a lighter yellow. Her paws fit her body, being smaller than the average cats' paws, and that reflects in her claws, and her fighting as well. Her legs are about a normal size, for her not for other cats.

So overall, her build is lean and small. Her fur color is a dark gold, and she has green eyes.

Views| As a kit, Smallsun didn't have parents to guide her into their views, so she developed one like she heard. She believes RiverClan never existed, and this is all the world there is, and nothing beyond it. She wasn't raised with a leader, so she believes they don't need one. If everything is working perfectly, then why should they have some tyrant come and take over?

Then, she started thinking. Where do the insects come from, if there is no world beyond our own? And she finally figured it out in her own mind. There was something watching them, and they sent the food to them, and each cat could communicate with them in some way if they desperatly needed to. She refers to them as the 'Holy Ones' but rarely speaks of them to the other cats, fearing they would ridicule her. She believes that if you speak to them, they will answer in your mind, as she is caught mumbling words to them often, begging them to send prey, rain, or a flood.

Kin| She never knew her mother, having had her die when she was being born. Then her father got killed in the Clan, leaving her with no parents, and only a brother to rely on. Her brother is still alive in the Clan, Snakestripe.

History| Smallsun was born into the clan, and after she was born her mother was gone. Her father named her after her size, a small kit, and her mother, his sun. He took care of her and her brother until she was walking, at which point he then died too from a fight with another cat. Being the protective brother of his sister, Snakestripe took on the role of father for Smallsun, as much as he could anyway.

When a cat would try and start a freshkill pile she would instantly try and grab something she could eat, and occasionally try hunting for herself, which never really worked out until she was older. They made friends with other cats, and they taught them the ways of hunting. At that point, her brother started becomig more and more detached from her, as he started becoming a Clanner. His friends slowly started talking more and more abut Clanners, in not so nice ways, and he realized they were wrong and he believed more what they were fighting aganist than for.

They shifted his view towards becoming a Clan without knowing it. So gradually Snakestripe began to make friends with Clanners, or try. Soon they changed him, as his con friends abandonded him.

She began to resent him in each and every way, although he was always soft and gentle towards her. She wishes he could just believe what most of the cats did... or what most of the cats should believe about life. Even if he didn't believe in her exact ideas about the Holy Ones, she would be ok. But she would never be ok with a Clanner as a brother.

Other| The names may not be the best, as I usually use birds and 'leaf xD So, please forgive me on that. Also... sorry the views/history section is so long. I wanted to try and make my cat a little different. Any problems, or confusion that I'm sure you probably had unfortunatly, please let me know.

[Ten]

Welcome to Starless, Leaf!


"The names may not be the best, as I usually use birds and 'leaf xD So, please forgive me on that."
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We can work through it together, and if you ever disagree with me about a suffix, don't be afraid to make your case for why it should be allowed. I'm reasonable. :3 First off, did you read the Name Rules?


"Also... sorry the views/history section is so long. I wanted to try and make my cat a little different. Any problems, or confusion that I'm sure you probably had unfortunatly, please let me know."
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Don't worry; length is not a problem at all! It's good that you want to develop your character in-depth.


"She has a short coat, with a dark gold coloring, and green eyes. On her underbelly the fur is a lighter yellow, and on her left ear she has one black spot."
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Yellow and black... so she's a tortie?


"If somebody were to actually get past the wall,"
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That sounds pretty crazy. The cats here consider that impossible, to the point where even thinking about this as a hypothetical situation would make her seem insane.


"and each cat coud communicate with them in some way if they desperatly needed to. She refers to them as the 'Holy Ones' but rarely speaks of them in the Clan. She believes that if you speak to them, they wil answer in your mind, as she is caught mumbling words to them often, begging them to send prey."
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A few typos here. However, the thing I need to point out is that the Clan has already disintegrated long ago.


Normally, I'd say you should put the narrative in her History and keep the Views as just her current views, but if you'd like to keep it this way, I will permit it because it works well.


"He took care of her and her brother until she was walking, at which point he then died too."
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You almost make it sound like that's what killed him. What did he die from?


"When a cat would try and start a freshkill pile she would instantly try and grab something she could eat, and occasionally try hunting for herself, which never really worked out until she was older. At that point, her brother started becomig more and more detached from her, as he started becoming a Clanner."
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What sparked that change?
Also, who taught them how to hunt?

[Leaf]

"The names may not be the best, as I usually use birds and 'leaf xD So, please forgive me on that."
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We can work through it together, and if you ever disagree with me about a suffix, don't be afraid to make your case for why it should be allowed. I'm reasonable. :3 First off, did you read the Name Rules?

>> Yep I read them. Ok, thanks for that ^ ^


"Also... sorry the views/history section is so long. I wanted to try and make my cat a little different. Any problems, or confusion that I'm sure you probably had unfortunatly, please let me know."
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Don't worry; length is not a problem at all! It's good that you want to develop your character in-depth.

>> Ok, thanks<3


"She has a short coat, with a dark gold coloring, and green eyes. On her underbelly the fur is a lighter yellow, and on her left ear she has one black spot."
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Yellow and black... so she's a tortie?

>> Not really, just one small black spot... if that's one...then yes.


"If somebody were to actually get past the wall,"
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That sounds pretty crazy. The cats here consider that impossible, to the point where even thinking about this as a hypothetical situation would make her seem insane.

>> She's not crazy... so let me go change that.


"and each cat coud communicate with them in some way if they desperatly needed to. She refers to them as the 'Holy Ones' but rarely speaks of them in the Clan. She believes that if you speak to them, they wil answer in your mind, as she is caught mumbling words to them often, begging them to send prey."
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A few typos here. However, the thing I need to point out is that the Clan has already disintegrated long ago.

>> I meant the cats, let me go change that too. Sorry about the typos, I must of missed them.


Normally, I'd say you should put the narrative in her History and keep the Views as just her current views, but if you'd like to keep it this way, I will permit it because it works well.

>> I'd like to keep it here for now so I don't have to work everything in, but next time I'll put it in History.


"He took care of her and her brother until she was walking, at which point he then died too."
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You almost make it sound like that's what killed him. What did he die from?

>> Teaching them to walk didn't kill him xD I'll go change that...


"When a cat would try and start a freshkill pile she would instantly try and grab something she could eat, and occasionally try hunting for herself, which never really worked out until she was older. At that point, her brother started becomig more and more detached from her, as he started becoming a Clanner."
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What sparked that change?
>> I probably need to explain that don't I?
Also, who taught them how to hunt?
>> ...Good point. Changed.

There. All changed. Please tell me if anything else is wrong/I didn't explain enough :3

[Ten]

"Yep I read them. Ok, thanks for that ^ ^"
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You're welcome. So, since the sun counts as something in the sky, what do you think would be a good suffix for her?


"Not really, just one small black spot... if that's one...then yes."
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Black markings aren't something cats can just have at random the way they can have white markings, and I don't think cats can be orange without being either tortie or tabby. I would expect a tortie to have a little more black than that, but it doesn't have to be a lot.


"I probably need to explain that don't I?"
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Yeah. You don't have to get too detailed, as this is her bio and not his, but there must be a reason for it. Somewhere along the line, something must have occurred that sent them in different directions.

[Leaf]

"Yep I read them. Ok, thanks for that ^ ^"
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You're welcome. So, since the sun counts as something in the sky, what do you think would be a good suffix for her?

>> Good point xD Would feather be acceptable? I know feathers come from birds, but they might have blown in through the cracks in the wall at one point. Other than that, maybe shadow?


"Not really, just one small black spot... if that's one...then yes."
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Black markings aren't something cats can just have at random the way they can have white markings, and I don't think cats can be orange without being either tortie or tabby. I would expect a tortie to have a little more black than that, but it doesn't have to be a lot.

>> Hm, ok. I'll just delete that part so it'll make more sense.

"I probably need to explain that don't I?"
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Yeah. You don't have to get too detailed, as this is her bio and not his, but there must be a reason for it. Somewhere along the line, something must have occurred that sent them in different directions.

>> I changed that, but if it needs any more changing let me know.

[Ten]

"Good point xD Would feather be acceptable? I know feathers come from birds, but they might have blown in through the cracks in the wall at one point."
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Maybe, but she's not feathery herself.


"Other than that, maybe shadow?"
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Well, she does have a shadow... What would it indicate?

There's a list of examples here: www.neopets.com/~warriornames#ss


"I'll just delete that part so it'll make more sense."
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Okay. Is she a mackerel tabby now?


"They made friends with other cats, and they taught them the ways of hunting. At that point, her brother started becomig more and more detached from her, as he started becoming a Clanner. He got new friends, and they shifted his view towards becoming a Clan. Snakestripe was still open to new ideas, and they converted him to their ways of thinking."
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It's sounding like he changed his ways because he and his sister were hanging out with not only different cats, but different types of cats. What started that? I would have thought he'd gravitate toward other cons, if he were one to begin with.

[Leaf]

"Good point xD Would feather be acceptable? I know feathers come from birds, but they might have blown in through the cracks in the wall at one point."
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Maybe, but she's not feathery herself.

>> Good point.


"Other than that, maybe shadow?"
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Well, she does have a shadow... What would it indicate?

There's a list of examples here: www.neopets.com/~warriornames#ss

>> I looked over the list (Bookmarked that, quite helpful.) And how about the suffix whisker, since she is sensitive emotionally.


"I'll just delete that part so it'll make more sense."
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Okay. Is she a mackerel tabby now?

>> I don't know the definite term... but it's just a plain coat color now with a white underbelly... I hope I'm not confusing you xD


"They made friends with other cats, and they taught them the ways of hunting. At that point, her brother started becomig more and more detached from her, as he started becoming a Clanner. He got new friends, and they shifted his view towards becoming a Clan. Snakestripe was still open to new ideas, and they converted him to their ways of thinking."
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It's sounding like he changed his ways because he and his sister were hanging out with not only different cats, but different types of cats. What started that? I would have thought he'd gravitate toward other cons, if he were one to begin with.

>> He wasn't really classified as a con from birth except from his parents. He wasn't really intrested in that at the time, and once he father died, the only people to decide what he wanted to be would be his friends. But you're right about the how part, let me go change that.

[Ten]

"And how about the suffix whisker, since she is sensitive emotionally."
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That works! The only drawback there is that there's already a character named Shortwhisker, so it could get a little confusing if you keep the same Small prefix.


"I don't know the definite term... but it's just a plain coat color now with a white underbelly... I hope I'm not confusing you"
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I know what you're imagining, but I've never seen a yellow cat that wasn't some kind of tabby. Have you?


"He wasn't really classified as a con from birth except from his parents. He wasn't really intrested in that at the time, and once he father died, the only people to decide what he wanted to be would be his friends. But you're right about the how part, let me go change that."
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Whoa, just realized I forgot to ask something.
Who raised her? That is, who nursed her as a kit?


"His friends slowly started talking more and more abut Clanners, in not so nice ways, and he realized they were wrong and he believed more what they were fighting aganist than for."
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This still sounds spontaneous.
I think I know what you're going for -- they were rude and abrasive, pushing him in the opposite direction without meaning to -- but I still don't understand why that would affect him and not her. Did their father not teach them both the same manners?

[Leaf]

"And how about the suffix whisker, since she is sensitive emotionally."
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That works! The only drawback there is that there's already a character named Shortwhisker, so it could get a little confusing if you keep the same Small prefix.

>> Ah ok. Then I could do Whitewhisker for her white whiskers. Yellowwhisker just looks sort of odd with the ww. Still I think Smallshadow would work, since she doesn't speak out alot, the effect in the Clan is small, so her 'shadow' would be small along with her appearance.


"I don't know the definite term... but it's just a plain coat color now with a white underbelly... I hope I'm not confusing you"
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I know what you're imagining, but I've never seen a yellow cat that wasn't some kind of tabby. Have you?

>> . . . good point. I guess she is a tabby then, I'll change that.

"He wasn't really classified as a con from birth except from his parents. He wasn't really intrested in that at the time, and once he father died, the only people to decide what he wanted to be would be his friends. But you're right about the how part, let me go change that."
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Whoa, just realized I forgot to ask something.
Who raised her? That is, who nursed her as a kit?

>> If I could let another cat who birthed around the same time do it that would be good... other than that I might have to extend her moms' life, I never thought of that.


"His friends slowly started talking more and more abut Clanners, in not so nice ways, and he realized they were wrong and he believed more what they were fighting aganist than for."
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This still sounds spontaneous.
I think I know what you're going for -- they were rude and abrasive, pushing him in the opposite direction without meaning to -- but I still don't understand why that would affect him and not her. Did their father not teach them both the same manners?

>> They didn't really grow up enough around their father to have his opinions really set in them.

[Ten]

"Ah ok. Then I could do Whitewhisker for her white whiskers."
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Sounds good. This time, though, it turns out White is a taken prefix. Howeverrr, Whitekit's creator, Modd, is inactive, so I can go ahead and grant you this one.


"Still I think Smallshadow would work, since she doesn't speak out alot, the effect in the Clan is small, so her 'shadow' would be small along with her appearance."
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That's not how suffixes work.
Also, remember that there is no Clan.


"If I could let another cat who birthed around the same time do it that would be good..."
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mmhm. She would view that cat as her mother, then.


"They didn't really grow up enough around their father to have his opinions really set in them."
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Somebody had to raise them. You can't just throw a couple of kittens into the ring and have them grow up safe and sound with no one to help but a few friendly acquaintances. Making friends isn't what they need. They need parents.