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Grace
Dec 11, 2009 19:12:43 GMT -5
Post by wpearlmermaid124 on Dec 11, 2009 19:12:43 GMT -5
Role player| Pearl _____
Name| Grace
Gender| She-cat
Physical Description| Cynthia has pure white fur and icy blue eyes. Her whiskers are about medium long and her tail is long. She moves cautiously but swiftly.
Views| Grace believes that no order can be kept without a single leader. She would like to be a leader, but is willing to let someone else take the stand for now. She would like the clan to stay together, for she believes that power comes in numbers
Kin| Her mother was the cat of a King and Queen. Her father was a rogue. Her father killed her mother shortly after she was born, and threatened to kill her too.
History| Grace was born from a cat of a Kind and Queen, whereas her father was a rogue and total mutt. She got the name Grace from her mother, who knew that the Queen, her owner,'s name was Grace.
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Grace
Dec 11, 2009 19:31:11 GMT -5
Post by Ten on Dec 11, 2009 19:31:11 GMT -5
"Name| Grace" -- Do you know about warrior names?
"Physical Description| Cynthia has" -- Who's Cynthia?
"pure white fur and icy blue eyes." -- Is she deaf?
"Her whiskers are about medium long" -- A little longer than average, then?
"Grace believes that no order can be kept without a single leader." -- Meaning at least one leader or more, or only one leader?
"She would like to be a leader," -- Why?
"She would like the clan to stay together," -- You mean reform. Clan should be capitalized.
"for she believes that power comes in numbers" <-- period -- Isn't the saying "strength", not power?
"Her mother was the cat of a King and Queen." -- A king? What are you talking about?
"Her father was a rogue." -- As opposed to what? There aren't any Clans here. Or do you mean he was a general rascal?
"Her father killed her mother shortly after she was born, and threatened to kill her too." -- This belongs in the history section, not here.
"She got the name Grace from her mother, who knew that the Queen, her owner,'s name was Grace." -- Owner? What do you mean? Have you read the plot and setting?
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