Sallowface WIP

[whitefoot]

Lots of people call me lots of different things xD

Some of my many nicknames are:
Whitey-san [seldom called that by a few other friends]
Whitesauce [don't ask x3]
Whiteh
White
MISTRESS WHITEY [my favorite hurhurhur<3]
or just Whitey.
but really I don't care what you call me.

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S A L L O W F A C E ||

s e x ||

she-cat

d e s c ||

This she-cat is very ragged and unclean, for she no longer cares about keeping herself perfect and spotless. The fur around her cheeks is ruffled and matted. Her ears and the fur surrounding them are frazzled and frayed, and her left ear is niched slightly at the tip. Her emaciated body is weak, not only from hunger and lack of water, but from age as well. She can no longer hunt rats with her aging body, and must settle with catching crickets and beetles, with the very occasional delicacy that is a bit of rat meat that has been left forgotten at the site of a hunt. But enough about her food life, as it does not pertain to her description. She has quite a bit of fur loss around her left flank, but it's less from mange and more because a large, sunken, bubbly scar parts the fur there. And let's see... ah, I suppose you must be wondering about her voice? Yes, Sallowface still has something of a voice. Her voice is croaky and rattled by age. Her tones are harsh and course, and even if she wanted to, she couldn't manage anything that didn't sound threatening.

Sallowface is a pale gray tabby, and her stripes are very bold against her coat's pale base color. Her muzzle is threaded with gray and silver hairs that declare her age. Her cheeks and the fur around her eyes is also very pale, but it has always been so. This is how she earned her name. Another distinct feature about Sallowface is her eyes. Er, one of her eyes in particular. Her right eye has scars lacing themselves through the flesh above and below her eyeball, giving her a bit of a nightmarish appearance. Her eye was unharmed by the rat that caused it, but her eyes are starting to fail due to her old age. Less important details on her description includes.. let's see.. Her tongue is a dark, fleshy color, about the same as the thin skin inside of her truly devastated ears. Her nose is slightly lighter than that, and is a very fleshy pink. Her teeth are nasty and yellowed, and some (the long, canines mostly) are chipped in a few places. Her breath isn't very attractive either.. I would describe it as the smell of carrion.

v i e w s ||

Sallowface is a Clanner. She does support the idea of forming a colony of some sort, so that the enclosure cats have a purpose, have a better chance of continuing the species and surviving. She thinks kits would fare better with a colony to help raise and protect them, and she also likes to think that the exchanging of survival knowledge among members could help everyone live.

f l e s h & b l o o d ||

key
deceased

Ratwhisker mate
Brownfur father
Beetleclaw uncle
Palestripe mother
Darkkit brother
Shadenose sister
Gritpelt son
Prickleclaw daughter
unnamed kit son
unnamed kit son

h i s t o r y ||
going to re-do it

n near the end of the dark season, Sallowface faced a harsh light season growing up. She and her sister, who was known as Shadekit at the time, began training earlier than what was usual for kits. This was because the light season was growing ever more powerful by the day, and their father, Brownfur, felt it would be best for them to learn now rather than in the middle of the hottest season. Brownfur's brother (Dustfoot's uncle), Beetleclaw, who had decided to stick with his brother and sort of band together, agreed with him. But Dustfoot's brother, Darkkit, missed out on the early training. He dehydrated and died before he could even start it. It was a harsh blow to Palestripe, Brownfur's mate and Dustfoot's mother, but it was an expected casualty.

The light season progressed steadily, and the early training seemed to be proving beneficial. The kits were able to catch a few crickets at a time before tiring, and their play-fighting with each other wasn't bad.. although they would usually just end up all giggly and playful, forgetting the importance of what they were doing. And the adults let them, because kits would always be kits. The kits' personalities were also blossoming. Shadekit was more of a vain she-kit, taking great pleasure in her soft kit-fur and her dark, intricate brown mackerel tabby markings, while Dustkit (as Sallowface was known at the time) was far more interested in stories. Whenever her family would meet up with another cat, usually elderly ones, she would beg for stories. She was greedy for knowledge, and she always wanted more.

In this way she took after her uncle, who had always loved stories as a kit. She made Beetleclaw tell her tales time and time again until she knew them (or at least part of them) by heart. He spun many, many tales, most of them with some sort of moral in mind. He also told her some very tall tales of what lay beyond the enclosure walls, like stories of giant monsters and different prey, and of magnificent cats that had always lived out there. Of course he didn't know what he was talking about.. he just imagined up many different creatures and places and things to satisfy Dustkit. But Dustkit was still just a kit, and very gullible, and believed every word that came out of her uncle's mouth. Brownfur would often scold Dustkit when she would talk about the outside, for he was particularly against insane cats, and did not like the thought of anything bigger than him out there.

But it was also because of her uncle that she was deemed insane later in life. Dustkit was captivated by her uncles stories of the outside world, and always wished to see it for herself. But she wasn't able to catch a glimpse outside until one freezing night. There was a rather large gap in the tall, tall ceiling of the enclosure, and they were just below it. Dustykit had just woken up from a nightmare, when she saw them. Through that gap she saw the sky, although she didn't know that was what it was at the time. For the ceiling of the enclosure had always been her sky. But now she truly saw.. she saw sparkling dots that were (although she didn't know it then) stars, and she saw just the bottom of a faint, cresent moon. She called it the Great White Claw. This was because, in her eyes, she saw not the moon, but a hooked white claw. And it was hypnotic to the little kit. She couldn't stop staring at it until sleep claimed her once more. When she woke up, she was ecstatic and disappointed at the same time. The moon was gone, and the dark blue had gone light. This was puzzling to the kit, and put her down a bit. But she couldn't help but tell what she told to her uncle.. and only to her uncle. She didn't tell it to her parents because she knew they would scold her, and Shadekit wouldn't listen to something so insane. Her uncle was quite concerned, but listened, and when she was done, he told her never to look out the gaps again, for he did not want his niece to be called insane.

But that didn't stop her.

Time passed. Shadekit became Shadepelt, named for her dark fur. Dustkit became Sallowface for her dusty, pale paws. Sallowface was now a fine young she-cat, and she ventured off on her own. Shadenose decided to stay with their mother and uncle.. her father had died from a rat attack, and her mother wasn't too far from her deathbed either. Sallowface said farewell to her sister and family anyway though, her lust for knowledge telling her to seek out the eldest of the cats, and she couldn't do that with her family keeping her back. So she traveled around the enclosure, talking with many old cats to inherit their knowledge, and many young ones too, who knew some stories. She never met anyone who had heard of the sparkling stars or the White Claw though, much less anyone who had dared look out the gaps in the walls. And as she was searching for someone like her, she met Ratwhisker, a dark gray tabby tomcat. He was a bit older than her, but he was a thinker. He was too much of a coward to look out the cracks in the walls though, but he didn't tell that to Sallowface. The two bonded and eventually became mates. And then, one cold night in the middle of the dark season, Sallowface gave birth to a small litter. Both toms. But they froze to death that night, for it was teeth-chatteringly cold. Too cold to keep a kit alive. It was unlucky that they had been born on such a terribly cold night, and the young couple was crushed.

They tried again, this time having some success. Two kits, one female and one male, Pricklekit and Gritkit, made up their latest litter. The two kits grew up, and Sallowface taught them well, although they didn't inherit as much a love for stories as their mother had. Gritkit became Gritpelt, and Pricklekit to Prickleclaw, and all too soon for Sallowface, they left to live on their own like any young adult. Ratwhisker had already died from an illness, so now Sallowface was left to age and rot alone. Living as a loner was tough, and one very dry, very hot light season, she decided to hunt. For a rat. She knew it was absolutely crazy, but she did it anyway. She prowled around for hours for a target, until she saw a small gray form sun-bathing on a large red stone. It was a small rat. It's mate however, was enormous, and ambushed Sallowface from behind.

Dustfoot's left flank was torn and severely bitten, but her eye was utterly useless. She was blind with pain as she fled the two rats, literally blind. She holed herself in a very cramped den, and there she stayed for days, plugging up her wounds with abundant cobwebs, drinking from a tiny puddle of hot water when she wasn't too stiff to move. She couldn't even catch a bug, but she was getting increasingly desperate for some sort of food. She had to survive. And one day, upon waking up, she saw her tail. She flicked it around for a few minutes, amused somehow by it, and then she clipped it off a few inches of the base with her teeth. When you haven't eaten for days and days, anything tastes good, you know? And that is how her knobby tail came to be. Anyway, it was a miracle that she didn't catch an infection.

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[Ten]

Most of the time I tell people to stick to the form, but it doesn't look like you've added or removed anything, I'll let you keep the sections as they are.


"oh, nd" <-- Oh, and?


"though her stripes are very difficult to spot"
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Have you seen a cat like that?


"Her right eye has three rugged, scars slicing down over it, sealing the lids shut forever."
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Have you researched how an eye would heal without veterinary assistance?


"Her nose is slightly light" <-- lighter?


"is almost a very fleshy pink"
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What do you mean, almost? Is it pink or isn't it?


"some would describe it"
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Who?


"Dustfoot is very old," <-- no comma
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How is her age a view?


"and very wise."
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Are you very wise?


"she can be considered insane,"
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Is she?


"and most cats fear the insane."
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Have you gone through every bio and verified this?


"But because of her curiosity"
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Curiosity in general? Or curiosity toward the outside?


"so many cats avoid her."
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Who?


"But every once in a while, a cat would come to her,"
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You're just making up random stuff about characters who aren't yours?


"Perhaps a claw or a rock that glitters."
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What does she do with these things?


"Sometimes she will flat-out deny him or her,"
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Why?


"Anyway, more about Dustfoot's actually personality" <-- actual?
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No, this is the views section. Speaking of which, considering it's the views section, and you seem to like being lengthy about things, you should put more focus on the actual views.


"Well.. she's more of a con than anything, although she's not totally against forming some sort of group.."
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What do you mean? She doesn't care?


"Beetlewing"
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Did he have wings?


"Prickleclaw"
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Why did she name her Pricklekit?


"Born near the end of the dark season, Dustfoot faced a harsh light season growing up."
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According to the grammar of this sentence, she was facing a harsh light season and growing up at the same time that she was born.


"who had decided to stick with his brother and sort of band together,"
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Just them two, or with others?


"but it was an expected casualty."
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They expected him to get dehydrated? Were they refusing to let him drink?



"(or atleast part" <-- at least?

"He also told her some very tall tales of what lay beyond the enclosure walls. Of giant monsters and different prey"
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This seems like it should be one sentence.


"(of course he didn't know what he was talking about.. he just imagined up many different creatures and places and things to satisfy Dustkit),"
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This can go afterward, as its own sentence.


"for he was particularly against insane cats,"
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What do you mean? How can someone be against insanity? Are there people who support insanity?



"Dustkit was captivated by her uncles" <-- uncle's?

"stories of the outside world," <-- no comma


"Dustykit had just woken up from a nightmare, when she saw them."
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I'm thinking you don't need a comma there.


"But now she truly saw.. she saw sparkling dots that were (although she didn't know it then) stars, and she saw just the bottom of a faint, cresent moon."
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The holes in the ceiling aren't that big.



"(Can I just skip a little bit of time here?"
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Sure. Remove this, though.


"Dustkit became Dustfoot."
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Why foot?


"Dustfoot was now a fine young she-cat,"
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What do you mean? Attractive?


"and she ventured off on her own."
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Implying they possessed a territory?


"her father had died from a rat attack,"
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Rats attacked him? Why?


"she couldn't do that with her family keeping her back."
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Why not?


"So she travelled" <-- traveled?


"around the enclosure, talking with many old cats to inherit their knowledge,"
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I'm thinking inheriting isn't something you can do with knowledge.


"Too cold to keep a kit alive."
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Even if pressed against her body?


"Living as a loner was tough,"
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Starless' definition of loner?


"She knew it was absolutely crazy,"
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Hunting rats? Or hunting rats in her condition?


"on a large red stone."
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I'm thinking any rocks around would have been used for the walls.


"It was a small rat."
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Wait. Was she hunting alone?


"It's mate however, was enormous, and ambushed Dustfoot from behind."
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Why?


"She holed herself in a very cramped den,"
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Made out of what?


"and then she clipped it off a few inches of the base with her teeth."
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Have you known a cat to do this? Or researched it?


"Anyway, it was a miracle that she didn't catch an infection."
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Sounds more contrived than a miracle.


"So now she lives a life bearing the scars of her mistake, and yada, yada, yada, sorry for the long history.. she's still alive today after many seasons have some and gone.. eeh I can't write anymore, and I don't think you want to read anymore"
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You're going to improve this ending, yes? This isn't just an application, you know. It's a bio, what people will go through and read to learn about her.

mm... looks like that image you have stretches the page when in blockquote.

[whitefoot]

<-- Oh, and?
XXX
Fixed, I believe. But if spellcheck didn't catch it, please do tell me.


Have you seen a cat like that?
XXX
Yes, I have. Only it was a very light ginger tabby cat, and it was about two years ago.


Have you researched how an eye would heal without veterinary assistance?
XXX
I have not, but where do you expect me to find this information? I have tried looking it up on the internet by typing in things such as "how do cat eyes heal" and "how the eye heals", but nothing has turned up.


"Her nose is slightly light" <-- lighter?
XXX
Yes, and it's been fixed


What do you mean, almost? Is it pink or isn't it?
XXX
It is pink, I don't know why I put almost in there.


Who?
XXX
Hmm. Fixed, I think.


How is her age a view?
XXX
I thought that, at the time, views meant personality. But what does age have to do with personality? Agh, another mistake. Fixed though. I'm planning to re-do that section.


Are you very wise?
XXX
Am I to be the judge of my own wisdom?
Well, judging by this lengthy list... no. I should have put more thought into her, but I was sloppy. Forgive me.


Is she?
XXX
Yes.


Have you gone through every bio and verified this?
XXX
That I have not, but I am planning to re-do that section.


Curiosity in general? Or curiosity toward the outside?
XXX
Her curiosity in general.


Who?

You're just making up random stuff about characters who aren't yours?
XXX
At the time I considered the other cats to be NPCs, or whatever they're called. I am planning to re-doing that section though, as i have stated before.


What does she do with these things?
XXX
I planned to add in what she did with those things, but I seemed to have forgotten to put it in there. In fact, I do think I just added that in there to add it in there. How idiotic of me.


Why?
XXX
For her own reasons. Say she didn't like his or her tone, or was simply too tired to tell a story. That or she didn't think his or her offering was fit enough.


No, this is the views section. Speaking of which, considering it's the views section, and you seem to like being lengthy about things, you should put more focus on the actual views.
XXX
I didn't know it was just the views section at the time. And I don't really like being lengthy, I just.. babble a lot. But yes, I will.


What do you mean? She doesn't care?
XXX
She thinks that if some cats want a colony or a clan or whatever, then good for them. But she would rather live by herself.


Did he have wings?
XXX
Obviously not. I changed it though.. God, am I turning into the Erins? Naming cats meaningless names like Sneezekit and Bumblekit? Augh.


Why did she name her Pricklekit?
XXX
Forgive me, I'm not the best at coming up with names. At the time I was looking for something to name her daughter, not something with meaning.. I did change it though, and I'm planning to re-do her history with reasons why she was named.


According to the grammar of this sentence, she was facing a harsh light season and growing up at the same time that she was born.
XXX
Wow, this is what I get for not role-playing in a few months.. Nonsense sentences, wonky spelling... I am re-doing the history though. Maybe.. I'm not entirely sure I like her. When I made her, I made her just to have to have character. I want a character that means something, not one that was made just to be made.


Just them two, or with others?
XXX
Just with his brother, his brother's mate, and the kits.


They expected him to get dehydrated? Were they refusing to let him drink?
XXX
I thought that, in the light season, there was little water and long droughts. I thought I had put in somewhere that he was a runt, therefor weaker than Shadekit and Dustkit, but apparently not.


"(or atleast part" <-- at least?
XXX
Yes, and I fixed it.


"He also told her some very tall tales of what lay beyond the enclosure walls. Of giant monsters and different prey"
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This seems like it should be one sentence.

"(of course he didn't know what he was talking about.. he just imagined up many different creatures and places and things to satisfy Dustkit),"
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This can go afterward, as its own sentence.
XXX
Both have been fixed.


What do you mean? How can someone be against insanity? Are there people who support insanity?
XXX
What I meant was simply that he did not like cats who wished to leave the enclosure, talked about the outside world, or glanced through the gaps.


"Dustkit was captivated by her uncles" <-- uncle's?

"stories of the outside world," <-- no comma

"Dustykit had just woken up from a nightmare, when she saw them."
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I'm thinking you don't need a comma there.
XXX
They'll all be fixed if I decide that I really want to keep this rather unoriginal character.


The holes in the ceiling aren't that big.
XXX
Sorry, I didn't know that.


Sure. Remove this, though.
XXX
Removed it.


Why foot?
XXX
Her feet were pale and musty.


What do you mean? Attractive?
XXX
Yes, attractive.


Implying they possessed a territory?
XXX
No, I merely meant she left her family to live alone.


Rats attacked him? Why?
XXX
I suppose I should've said that he died from infected rat bites that he had received while hunting with his mate and brother.


Why not?
XXX
They were getting older and weaker, more frail from age.

"So she travelled" <-- traveled?
XXX
Yes. Fixed.


I'm thinking inheriting isn't something you can do with knowledge.
XXX
Inheriting means to come to possess, yes? One cannot come to possess knowledge?


Even if pressed against her body?
XXX
Would the cold sand that they were sleeping on combined with the freezing temperatures and short fur not be enough to kill a small, newborn kit? If you put a tiny kitten inside a freezer, do you think it's going to live very long?


Starless' definition of loner?
XXX
Yes.


Hunting rats? Or hunting rats in her condition?
XXX
Hunting rats alone and in her condition.


I'm thinking any rocks around would have been used for the walls.
XXX
Ah. I should've realized that.


Wait. Was she hunting alone?
XXX
Considering her kits left and she didn't take another mate.. yes.


Why?
XXX
If you see a tiger staring hungrily at your friend from a distance, would you not assume it was hunting your friend? No, tigers are not man-eaters, I'm just making an example. Can you not tell when a cat is about to pounce? When my cats are about to pounce on something(like a toy), their tails lash, their rear sort of shakes, their eyes are trained solely on that object, and their ears are facing forward. I can also see their muscles and legs sort of flex. Do you think the rat couldn't tell that Dustfoot was hunting it's mate?


Made out of what?
XXX
I'm sorry, the setting in my mine must've been in a forest, and the den an old badger set or something. I'm used to the traditional warrior cat role-plays, with the forests and moors and such. It won't happen again.


Have you known a cat to do this? Or researched it?
XXX
Have you known cats to have anthromorphic powers and to build a giant enclosure and seal other cats inside it and then run away? XD I'm joking, but I do see your point. Next time I have something like that happen to a character, I'll research it beforehand.


Sounds more contrived than a miracle.
XXX
Indeed it does.


You're going to improve this ending, yes? This isn't just an application, you know. It's a bio, what people will go through and read to learn about her.
XXX
That depends on whether or not I wish to keep her or start a more thorough, meaningful character that I really do enjoy making a bio for.

mm... looks like that image you have stretches the page when in blockquote.
XXX Does it? It doesn't appear so on my screen, but I've removed it anyway.

I do appreciate your taking the time to read through the bios and have people correct their mistakes. I'm sure it makes them (made me, anyway) think harder about just what has been put in this biography.

[Ten]

"Only it was a very light ginger tabby cat"
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But Dustfoot is brown, no?
Have you seen a brown tabby whose stripes are hard to see?


"where do you expect me to find this information?"
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This is what I found.
www.cat-health-guide.org/cateyeinjury.html


"Am I to be the judge of my own wisdom?"
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Well said. No, you are not.


"I should have put more thought into her, but I was sloppy. Forgive me."
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Of course I forgive you, miss. Haven't you looked at other character threads?


"Yes."
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Then don't say she can be considered. Say she is.


"Her curiosity in general."
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Curiosity is not insanity.


"At the time I considered the other cats to be NPCs"
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You know what your characters would do and your characters only. That way we don't have "everyone thinks she's beautiful" or "everyone is mean and picks on her even though she is kind and caring".


"For her own reasons."
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Having a reason isn't a reason, silly.


"Say she didn't like his or her tone, or was simply too tired to tell a story. That or she didn't think his or her offering was fit enough."
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Say that, then.


"But she would rather live by herself."
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Why?


"I thought that, in the light season, there was little water and long droughts."
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Yes.


"I thought I had put in somewhere that he was a runt,"
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aha. That's an important detail.


"They'll all be fixed if I decide that I really want to keep this rather unoriginal character."
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The insanity is unoriginal, but I like the idea of an old storyteller.
I don't think we have any of those.


"Her feet were pale and musty."
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As opposed to the rest of her?


"Yes, attractive."
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Who finds her attractive? You?


"I suppose I should've said that he died from infected rat bites"
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Yes, that's different.


"They were getting older and weaker, more frail from age."
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How did this hold her back? In her quest for knowledge, was she running all over the place or doing anything athletic?


"Inheriting means to come to possess, yes?"
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As in inheriting a gene or inheriting money from a deceased relative.

1. to take or receive (property, a right, a title, etc.) by succession or will, as an heir
2. to receive as if by succession from predecessors
3. to receive (a genetic character) by the transmission of hereditary factors.
4. to succeed (a person) as heir.
5. to receive as one's portion


"If you put a tiny kitten inside a freezer, do you think it's going to live very long?"
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The enclosure isn't a freezer. It isn't coated in ice.
It has lots of warm cat bodies.


"Hunting rats alone"
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She's an idiot?


"Do you think the rat couldn't tell that Dustfoot was hunting it's mate?"
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Nope.
Rats are that loyal?


"I'm used to the traditional warrior cat role-plays"
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We all are. Starless is a challenge.


"It doesn't appear so on my screen"
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I have a wide monitor, but I can tell an image is distorting the thread when the gender symbol gets pushed to the next line.


"I'm sure it makes them (made me, anyway) think harder"
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Thank you, miss. I'm always glad to know I've made someone think.

[whitefoot]

But Dustfoot is brown, no?
Have you seen a brown tabby whose stripes are hard to see?
XXX
I have not. Alright, I shall change her design.. how does a pale gray tabby with yellow-green eyes sound? And a change in color calls for a change in name..
Since there aren't any leaders to appoint warrior names, do mothers have to name their kits with a suffix and prefix? Or can the kits be named names like.. Zafina, Roslin, Kaar, etc.?


This is what I found.
www.cat-health-guide.org/cateyeinjury.html
XXX
Where in there does it say how an eye heals without medical assistance?


Of course I forgive you, miss. Haven't you looked at other character threads?
XXX
I have, and to be honest, when I first found this site, I was utterly shocked at how thorough you are. You are the first admin I've seen that actually makes a list of mistakes instead of just saying "Fix the eye color, blah, blah, yeah, you're accepted".
I was also rather disturbed by the fact there were some bios that had multiple pages of these question-answer things x]


Curiosity is not insanity.
XXX
That it is not. I think I'll scratch the insane bit though... it is unoriginal, I agree.


You know what your characters would do and your characters only. That way we don't have "everyone thinks she's beautiful" or "everyone is mean and picks on her even though she is kind and caring".
XXX
I see, I will avoid such things like that.


Say that, then.
XXX
Then I shall.


Why?
XXX
Because the thought of a lone, old, crazy cat was appealing to me.. but now it is not so. I think I'll change her so that she is more friendly.


aha. That's an important detail.
XXX
Then I will be sure to add that in.


The insanity is unoriginal, but I like the idea of an old storyteller.
I don't think we have any of those.
XXX
Then I suppose I will keep her :]


As opposed to the rest of her?
XXX
I'm changing her appearance, so her name will also be changed.


Who finds her attractive? You?
XXX
Me? No. I was trying to look at her through the eyes of another cat, perhaps a tom.


How did this hold her back? In her quest for knowledge, was she running all over the place or doing anything athletic?
XXX
I doubt that old, frail cats are going to want to or be able to travel around the enclosure to satisfy a single cat's lust for knowledge.


As in inheriting a gene or inheriting money from a deceased relative...
XXX
This wording will be changed.


The enclosure isn't a freezer. It isn't coated in ice. It has lots of warm cat bodies.
XXX
I see.. what would be a more realistic way for kits to die soon after birth then?


She's an idiot?
XXX
She was delirious from hunger.. I suppose.. it will all be changed anyway.


Nope.
Rats are that loyal?
XXX
Mistakes, mistakes.. I doubt it, although I have not done any reasearch to confirm that.. have you?


We all are. Starless is a challenge.
XXX
That it is. A challenge, but challenging role-plays are always far better than normal ones, are they not?

[Ten]

"how does a pale gray tabby with yellow-green eyes sound?"
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Sounds good.


"do mothers have to name their kits with a suffix and prefix?"
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Why wouldn't they do so?


"Or can the kits be named names like.. Zafina, Roslin, Kaar, etc.?"
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Random syllables? Cats don't have human phonetics, so they would use words with meaning rather than words that we think sound good.


"Where in there does it say how an eye heals without medical assistance?"
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Nowhere that I saw. Rather, it explained what level of care would be required for different levels of injury. How bad was Dustfoot's eye?


"I have, and to be honest, when I first found this site, I was utterly shocked at how thorough you are."
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Aw, shucks.


"You are the first admin I've seen that actually makes a list of mistakes instead of just saying 'Fix the eye color, blah, blah, yeah, you're accepted'."
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I take it you've not been to any good fora.


"I was also rather disturbed by the fact there were some bios that had multiple pages of these question-answer things"
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Every case is different.


"Because the thought of a lone, old, crazy cat was appealing to me.."
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No, not you. Her. Why does she not want to live in a Clan?


"I was trying to look at her through the eyes of another cat, perhaps a tom."
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Who?


"I doubt that old, frail cats are going to want to or be able to travel around the enclosure to satisfy a single cat's lust for knowledge."
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They don't have to follow her around all day. Did they do that before? Anyway, even if they are old, can't they walk? Or do they lay on their sides day in and day out?


"I see.. what would be a more realistic way for kits to die soon after birth then?"
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Disease, or perhaps the mother could become too dehydrated to produce enough milk. Or they could be stillborn.


"have you?"
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Nope.


"A challenge, but challenging role-plays are always far better than normal ones, are they not?"
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Indeed.

[whitefoot]

Why wouldn't they do so?
XXX
If Clan religion and the Clan itself has died out, why not the names?


Random syllables? Cats don't have human phonetics, so they would use words with meaning rather than words that we think sound good.
XXX
Then how about one-word names? Like Sand, or Dark, or.. nevermind. I'll think of something for her :]


Nowhere that I saw. Rather, it explained what level of care would be required for different levels of injury. How bad was Dustfoot's eye?
XXX
I imagined it pretty bad, the eyeball having been gouged and raked severely on the surface of the eye by the rat's claws.


I take it you've not been to any good fora.
XXX
I have, but I haven't seen any admins that care about bios as much as you do.


No, not you. Her. Why does she not want to live in a Clan?
XXX
XD Because I didn't want her to. I had no real reason, but once I remake the bio, I shall have one.


Who?
XXX
Any young, hormonal tom's eyes.


They don't have to follow her around all day. Did they do that before? Anyway, even if they are old, can't they walk? Or do they lay on their sides day in and day out?
XXX
They were old, and probably had arthritis. Arthritis would make walking more painful. Perhaps could we drop this one, since it will be changed?

[Ten]

"If Clan religion and the Clan itself has died out, why not the names?"
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Names aren't big things like lifestyles and beliefs. Take a look at America. We don't live like we used to and our religious demographics are different, but names haven't changed much. We still have Rachels and Sarahs and Johns.


"I imagined it pretty bad"
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Sounds like it would leave more than a little stripey scar.


"I haven't seen any admins that care about bios as much as you do"
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I feel special.


"Any young, hormonal tom's eyes."
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So she's average?

[whitefoot]

Sounds like it would leave more than a little stripey scar.
XXX
Yes, I'm working on a new image with a new scar.


So she's average?
XXX
She was average as a young cat, I suppose. In my eyes anyway.


I've been pondering on the idea of another character, and right now I can't seem to work with Dustfoot. I don't have enough.. muse, I suppose, for her at the moment. Could I persuade you to let her bio sit here for a bit, long enough for me to work on this other character, and then come back to it once I've finished? Or perhaps could I make a notebook and store it there? :]

[Ten]

"Could I persuade you to let her bio sit here for a bit, long enough for me to work on this other character, and then come back to it once I've finished?"
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Be my guest.