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Post by sunset on Apr 26, 2009 19:37:31 GMT -5
"but I could care less."
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You mean couldn't care less?
Or you do care?
I'm thinking the latter, seeing as if you didn't care, you would edit it and move on, no?
Congrats. You've thoroughly confused me.
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Post by Ten on Apr 26, 2009 19:44:05 GMT -5
"Congrats. You've thoroughly confused me."
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Um, thanks? I'm not understanding where you're coming from either.
I suppose you're tired of editing?
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Post by sunset on Apr 26, 2009 19:47:14 GMT -5
Um, thanks? I'm not understanding where you're coming from either.
I suppose you're tired of editing?
Extremely.
And, after a long... hour of editing, I get a bit harsh in my words.
I um... give you full write to do whatever you want to my kitties bio, as long as you don't change it to much.
It'd still like my original kitty...
Unless you don't want too.
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Post by Ten on Apr 26, 2009 19:52:59 GMT -5
I'll do that with whatever minor sentence errors I find
but I'll continue to post questions on what's dubious.
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Post by sunset on Apr 26, 2009 19:55:31 GMT -5
I'll do that with whatever minor sentence errors I find
but I'll continue to post questions on what's dubious
Alright.
Sounds Wonderful.
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Post by Ten on Apr 26, 2009 20:12:17 GMT -5
"Being born at a troubled time for his family"
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What do you mean?
"He does like the sound of a clan forming."
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Why? Would it make him feel safer? How does he think it would improve his life?
"Sorrelkit's father never really liked him"
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Why's that?
"Shadownose, for his good hunting skill,"
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How does he use his nose during hunting?
"with all of the hardships"
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What do you mean?
"From trying to lure bloodthirsty cats to where the shadowy tom slept"
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Why didn't that work?
"He attacked Sorreltail's family"
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So the whole family couldn't defend themselves against one cat?
"Shadownose left as soon as possible"
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Implying that family has claimed a specific territory, rather than roam like other cats?
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Gosh
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Post by Gosh on Apr 27, 2009 15:52:55 GMT -5
"Why? Rats were fierce, and they sTaRrrzies (lolwhat? the censors gotcha) them off somehow.(?)" I meant the "anyways" sounded rather like you were having a conversation; normally these are kind of objective, I think...haha, I'm not sure if it needs to be changed, so whatever  " by his Sorrelpaw's parents" Unless he finds that Sorrelpaw is 'his' at a young age, the his shouldn't be there :3 "Shadownose, for his good hunting skill, no matter how little prey there was." I was under the impression that nose meant curiosity, but regardless, this sentence is a fragment - perhaps it could be combined with the next sentence? "hehehehe" This "hehehehe" just lowered my opinion of you. xP |
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