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Post by Ten on Jun 26, 2011 22:29:27 GMT -5
Before we can proceed, please use complete sentences and the bio form. |
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Post by emilie on Jun 30, 2011 6:04:33 GMT -5
is that ok?
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Post by Ten on Jun 30, 2011 9:57:11 GMT -5
You've got the form right. Thank you.
However, you still need to use correct punctuation and capitalization to form sentences.
example: he has one green eye and the other is opaque and milky he was blinded by a burn
becomes: He has one green eye and the other is opaque and milky. He was blinded by a burn.
So, how was he burned?
"howlclaw believes that the idea of the clan being split is senseless because there would be less protection for all"
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He wants the Clan to reform, then? Is protection the only reason he wants that?
"mother is howltail father is moonpaw and his sister and brother are moontail and moonwhiskers and howlfur mother and father deceased"
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Did you read the name rules?
For one thing, you can't have a family of cats all with the same prefix.
Prefixes must be different for each cat.
"howlpaw got his name from the sound he made whilst fighting a whiring howling noise"
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Kits receive their prefixes at birth, when they are newborns.
The traditional system is for cats to be named (Prefix)kit as kits,
(Prefix)paw as apprentices,
and (Prefix)(any warrior suffix of the parent's choosing) when they complete warrior training.
You don't have to adhere strictly to that route and change the name for each rite of passage, but he does need to have received a name while a kit.
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Post by emilie on Jul 1, 2011 5:50:20 GMT -5
thank you could it be like his family were mooneye [mother] sunfur [father] snowear [sister and iceclaw [brother]
I forgot about the naming while he was a kit thin I guess he was named because he would raise his pawsand howl when he was upset or [something]
his eye was exposed to the sun for too long?
and he believes that they shouldn't split because then there would be less protection and the cats would never actually be friends again and that the past cats wouldn't have wanted it it would just be foolish
and I read the name rules.
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Post by Ten on Jul 1, 2011 17:49:03 GMT -5
"could it be like his family were mooneye [mother] sunfur [father] snowear [sister and iceclaw [brother]"
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Moon and sun, as specified in the name rules, aren't options, I'm afraid.
"I guess he was named because he would raise his pawsand howl when he was upset or [something]"
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Like every other kit?
"his eye was exposed to the sun for too long?"
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How do you mean? What, he... stuck his eye up to one of the cracks in the wall and just stood unblinking like that for a few days?
"and he believes that they shouldn't split"
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You seem to be talking as though a Clan still exists.
The Clan already has split. The debate is whether it should reform.'
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Post by emilie on Jul 1, 2011 20:42:38 GMT -5
sorry I thought the enclosure would at least have some kind of light do you mean to say that it is dark all the time?
I guess his name could be because of he would howl and slap his siblings when he was angry [not like other kits]
sorry about the moon and sun thing how about Brackenfur [bracken is a plant kind] and his mother is watereye?
and as for the clan thing I was kind of confused sorry yes he thinks the clan should reform
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Post by Ten on Jul 4, 2011 0:11:33 GMT -5
Sorry about the delay. Still not back in town yet.
Alright, here we go.
"sorry I thought the enclosure would at least have some kind of light do you mean to say that it is dark all the time?"
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No, there is some light that comes through the cracks.
I'm not sure how you would burn your eye on it is all.
"I guess his name could be because of he would howl and slap his siblings when he was angry [not like other kits]"
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...slap?
"how about Brackenfur [bracken is a plant kind]"
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See the rules again.
"and his mother is watereye?"
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How does she look like water?
"and as for the clan thing I was kind of confused sorry yes he thinks the clan should reform"
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mmkay. Change it to that then.
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Post by emilie on Jul 5, 2011 6:15:57 GMT -5
Sorry about me I am a bit muddled about it but I read everything again and understand thoroughly!
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Post by Ten on Jul 5, 2011 20:32:40 GMT -5
Very good. Could you format your sentences correctly now, please?
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Post by emilie on Jul 8, 2011 1:57:59 GMT -5
I did it
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