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Post by jennifer on Mar 19, 2010 16:45:43 GMT -5
Role player| Jennifer -x-x-x-x-x-  Name| Paleheart Gender| She-cat Physical Description| Paleheart has a long, slender body with short white fur. Her eyes are the color of amber. Nothing else is unique about her. Views| Paleheart believes that there should be a leader for the (reformed) Clan, however it must be lead by the right cat. The cats in the enclosure should be organized in duties, which would ensure the necessary care for elders and cats expecting kits. Paleheart values others needs, and believes that if there was a (reformed) Clan, then those needs would be treated to. She disagrees with her brother's hunger for power because he is desperate to attain the position. She believes the leader must be strong but respectful and care about the Clan. Although Paleheart might have some of the suitable qualities of a leader, she is not brave and unable to face challenges by herself. Kin| Lividfoot- Brother - Alive Stoneclaw - Father - Deceased Birchnose - Mother - Deceased History| Paleheart received her warrior name because of the color of her fur and because of her warm-hearted personality. Her mother was her mentor when she was an apprentice. Birchnose was a sincere cat and Paleheart developed those traits; hearty, honest, and kind-hearted. She were taught that only the cats that have determination, was respectful to others, and had a amiable personality were the ones that achieved things. "Now Paleheart..." Birchnose studied her daughter with wide eyes, "You have found an injured cat; what do you do?" she mewed. Her long tail was wrapped around her front paws as she waited patiently for an answer. Paleheart glanced at her mother, "I would find out if they could move or not. If so, I would bring them to a safe spot in the enclosure. They would need some food to help them bring back their strength and ensure a safe recovery. I would hunt whatever was necessary. I'm a healthy cat, and I can wait the next day for my meal if I must." replied Paleheart. Paleheart has never agreed with her brother and fathers views of ambition, and hopes that one day her brother will learn a lesson of what is right. "Sootfoot (will use for now until can find a suitable name)! You are so selfish! How can you think that way? I swear your worst than father. Has this all gone to your head?" Paleheart hissed, anger flaring in her eyes. "Psh, selfish? I'm only being smart. Your native, Paleheart. Thinking that everything is good in this world. Do you not remember, the history of how we even got in this place? Only the strong will survive, and you are not one of them." Sootfoot replied coldly. |
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Post by Ten on Mar 19, 2010 19:24:56 GMT -5
'Ello, Jennifer. Welcome to Starless. =)
"Views| Paleheart believes that there should be a leader, however it must be lead by the right cat."
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The (reformed) Clan must be led by the right cat, you mean?
"She disagrees with her brothers hunger for power." <-- brother's
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What do you mean? She disagrees that he has a hunger for power? She disagrees that he deserves power?
"She believes the leader must be strong," <-- no comma
"Paleheart is nervous that if she ever got the responsibility of a leader, she might panic and would not be able to guide her fellow cats."
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What makes her think there's any chance she'll become leader?
Also, why does she want a Clan and why does she want someone to lead it?
"Paleheart received her warrior name because of the color of her fur," <-- no comma
"She learned under her Mother's influence." <-- lowercase mother's
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I take it you mean that her mother was her mentor during her apprenticeship?
"Her mother, Birchnose, was a sincere cat and Paleheart developed those traits from her."
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"Those traits" meaning "sincerity"? How was she sincere?
"She was taught that only the cats that have determination, was" <-- were
"respectful to others, and had a genuine personality"
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"Genuine" meaning "honest"?
"Paleheart has never agreed with her brother and fathers views of ambition, and hopes that one day her brother will learn a lesson of what is right."
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More on this once I read her brother's bio. Speaking of which, you'll have to change that link in Paleheart's bio once Sootfoot gets accepted.
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Post by jennifer on Mar 22, 2010 14:48:50 GMT -5
Hello Ten =)
The (reformed) Clan must be led by the right cat, you mean
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Yes, should I change the sentence a bit?
What do you mean? She disagrees that he has a hunger for power? She disagrees that he deserves power?
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She disagrees about why he wants to be leader. Paleheart thinks that Sootfoot is willing to kill to become leader because he is desperate to attain the position.
"She believes the leader must be strong," <-- no comma
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Corrected.
What makes her think there's any chance she'll become leader?
Also, why does she want a Clan and why does she want someone to lead it?
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Hmm, she doesn't really think there is a chance of becoming leader. She believes that because she is not brave and is scared to face challenges, she would not be a great leader. Although she wants to reform the Clan again because then the cats would be able to help one another in need.
"Paleheart received her warrior name because of the color of her fur," <-- no comma
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"She learned under her Mother's influence." <-- lowercase mother's
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I take it you mean that her mother was her mentor during her apprenticeship?
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and yes, her mother mentored her and her father mentored Sootfoot.
"Her mother, Birchnose, was a sincere cat and Paleheart developed those traits from her."
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"Those traits" meaning "sincerity"? How was she sincere?
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Sincere, as in that her mother was honest/truthful. Yes, and "those traits" I also mean hearty (cheerful) and kind-hearted. Shall I add those in?
"She was taught that only the cats that have determination, was" <-- were
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Corrected.
"respectful to others, and had a genuine personality"
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"Genuine" meaning "honest"?
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Hmm, kind of. I think I will change that to "amiable personality"
"Paleheart has never agreed with her brother and fathers views of ambition, and hopes that one day her brother will learn a lesson of what is right."
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More on this once I read her brother's bio. Speaking of which, you'll have to change that link in Paleheart's bio once Sootfoot gets accepted.
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Alright ^^
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Post by jennifer on Mar 22, 2010 14:57:19 GMT -5
I modified my post, and added some things.
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Post by Ten on Mar 22, 2010 19:38:34 GMT -5
"She disagrees about why he wants to be leader. Paleheart thinks that Sootfoot is willing to kill to become leader because he is desperate to attain the position."
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So he's saying he wants to be leader for one reason (which would be what?) but she doesn't believe that's why?
"Although she wants to reform the Clan again because then the cats would be able to help one another in need."
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And she values helping other cats? mmkay.
Why does she want a leader?
"Shall I add those in?"
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Yes, and I'd like you to give some examples of what she would say and do that expresses those adjectives.
"I modified my post, and added some things."
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Mmkay. I tend to assume you've edited the bio when you post on it, unless you state otherwise. :3 I won't be rereading it again until we finish our current line of discussion, though.
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Post by jennifer on Mar 23, 2010 16:17:22 GMT -5
"She disagrees about why he wants to be leader. Paleheart thinks that Sootfoot is willing to kill to become leader because he is desperate to attain the position."
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So he's saying he wants to be leader for one reason (which would be what?) but she doesn't believe that's why?
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Yes, which the reason would be to have control over the cats.. and she believes that his view is not the right reason of wanting to become leader.
"Although she wants to reform the Clan again because then the cats would be able to help one another in need."
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And she values helping other cats? mmkay.
Why does she want a leader?
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To keep the cats organized, and to have things under control. Plus she feels sorry for the elders that have to tend for themselves.
"Shall I add those in?"
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Yes, and I'd like you to give some examples of what she would say and do that expresses those adjectives.
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Alrighty ^-^
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Post by Ten on Mar 23, 2010 19:10:37 GMT -5
"Yes, which the reason would be to have control over the cats.. and she believes that his view is not the right reason of wanting to become leader."
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Wait, what? By saying yes, you're telling me that her brother says to her, "I want to become leader to have control" and she doesn't believe that's why he wants to be leader?
"To keep the cats organized,"
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What's wrong with disorganized cats, would she say?
"to have things under control"
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Okay, she wants a leader because a leader controls, but she doesn't want her brother to be leader because he wants to control? Is she supposed to be a hypocrite?
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Post by jennifer on Mar 23, 2010 19:36:52 GMT -5
Wait, what? By saying yes, you're telling me that her brother says to her, "I want to become leader to have control" and she doesn't believe that's why he wants to be leader?
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Opps, sorry. I was wrong D: He does want control and yes she thinks thats why he wants to be leader. Just not for the right reasons (explained at bottom of post)
What's wrong with disorganized cats, would she say?
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"The cats need to be organized so everyone has a job to do in a Clan, from hunting to taking care of the elders. If it's not organized, then things would be a mess and cats wouldn't know what to do what and when."
Thats what Paleheart would say :3
Okay, she wants a leader because a leader controls, but she doesn't want her brother to be leader because he wants to control? Is she supposed to be a hypocrite?
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She wants a leader to control the cats in a respectful way and treat them fairly. Meaning, treat the warriors with the same respect as the elders, or any other rank. However, she thinks that her brother will be disrespectful towards the cats and try to get rid of the older cats and the weak because he thinks they are useless.
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Post by Ten on Mar 23, 2010 21:19:53 GMT -5
"If it's not organized, then things would be a mess and cats wouldn't know what to do what and when."
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That's like saying, "If things weren't organized, things wouldn't be organized." Why doesn't she like disorganization?
"Meaning, treat the warriors with the same respect as the elders, or any other rank."
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For real? She doesn't believe the elderly deserve extra respect?
"However, she thinks that her brother will be disrespectful towards the cats and try to get rid of the older cats and the weak because he thinks they are useless."
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aha. Make that clear, then.
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