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Post by Ten on Feb 6, 2010 18:26:35 GMT -5
"A thin, white she-cat with orange eyes" <-- Fragment. She is one.
"Namely for her own benefit" -- I understand that this fragment is for stylistic purposes, but to keep things clear I suggest incorporating it into the previous one.
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Post by Cloud on Feb 7, 2010 14:28:38 GMT -5
Fixed both of those things. o3o
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