Barkpaw

[Ten]

"Mehehe"
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I take it she'll no longer be a part of the picture?

[kayte103]

"I take it she'll no longer be a part of the picture?"
--x
Eh, I'll kill her off eventually. Probably when Barkpaw's completed most of his training.

[Ten]

"I'll kill her off eventually."
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But you will be role playing her? In that case, she needs a bio.

[kayte103]

"But you will be role playing her? In that case, she needs a bio."
--x
All right then. I'll make one for her after this.

[Ten]

You don't have to wait until Barkpaw's in to start on hers.


"Thornclaw"
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How does he look like a- wait. How would they know about thorns?


"Nightwind"
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Is he windy?


"food scarce, as they" <-- somehow this doesn't seem to match well with its antecedent


"Because of this, Barkkit's mother, Lightfur, was weakened, therefore she only gave birth to him."
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Although I get what this is saying, using because and therefore in the same sentence seems like too much.


"Also," <-- I suggest you remove this, considering it's not an addition so much as a continuation.


"he looked up to them for advice," <-- no comma

[kayte103]

"You don't have to wait until Barkpaw's in to start on hers."
--x
I can't read more than two books at once. I'm sure I can say the same for making and fixing bios.

"How does he look like a- wait. How would they know about thorns?"
--x
Aren't there thorns on the little branch-like formations that grow in the enclosure? And thorns are brown. Enough said.

"Is he windy?"
--x
"...for his swiftness."

[Ten]

"Aren't there thorns on the little branch-like formations that grow in the enclosure?"
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Nothing grows inside the enclosure. Are you talking about the branches that make up the walls?


"...for his swiftness."
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Is he windy?

[kayte103]

"Nothing grows inside the enclosure. Are you talking about the branches that make up the walls?"
--x
Ah. Then yes.

"Is he windy?"
--x
Um... he runs like the wind? Otherwise, what suffix would you suggest that implies swiftness?

[Ten]

"Then yes."
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mm... wouldn't have thought any of those would have thorns.


"he runs like the wind?"
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I'm looking for a yes or a no here. Is he windy?


"Otherwise, what suffix would you suggest that implies swiftness?"
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Some would say foot, but I myself don't think much of that suffix.
There are some attributes that just don't have specific suffixes to express them.

[kayte103]

"wouldn't have thought any of those would have thorns."
--x
They're brown and pointy, yes? I would consider those thorns.

"I'm looking for a yes or a no here. Is he windy?"
--x
... No x3 I just can't think of any other suffix for him.