Brain
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Post by Brain on Sept 7, 2009 9:38:05 GMT -5
"If hidden second, you mean?"
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Yes.
Did she scale the side of the wall, or did she stand up on her hind legs and place him there?
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At that height...Okay, I'll say she stood on her legs.
Okay then, night.
Wow, that is tragic. I didn't think about that when I was writing it.
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Post by Ten on Sept 7, 2009 11:39:46 GMT -5
"(in fact, she can sprint 80 feet before dropping from exhaustion and waiting ten minutes to catch her breath),"
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I'm thinking this should be its own sentence. Also, put eighty, as in the word.
"Views| Shadowkit supports a clan because other cats in her position would starve without her prodigious speed."
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So her speed feeds her? Wait - did she get any hunting training before her mother died? And I take it she was weaned, too?
"She put Shadowkit in second so that her pelt would act as camouflage."
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You should reword this; it's still saying that the camouflage was based on when she was put in.
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Brain
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Post by Brain on Sept 7, 2009 13:23:34 GMT -5
So her speed feeds her? Wait - did she get any hunting training before her mother died? And I take it she was weaned, too?
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She was weaned, and this was a recent event for her, she was almost a season old when this happened, and now she is a full season. She doesn't know how to use her claws, so she generally just tries to bite a leg off or something. It can take a while for her prey to die.
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Post by Ten on Sept 7, 2009 17:28:02 GMT -5
"She doesn't know how to use her claws,"
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With skill, you mean? She does know... how to extend them, right?
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Brain
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Post by Brain on Sept 7, 2009 17:59:36 GMT -5
"With skill, you mean? She does know... how to extend them, right?"
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Of course she knows how to extend them, she just rarely has a clean kill.
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