Nightbreeze

[Gosh]

Role player| Gosh
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Name| Nightbreeze

Gender| Tom

Physical Description| Nightbreeze is a fairly average-sized black cat with yellow eyes. Although he is not the most graceful cat in the enclosure, his appearance is not very distinguishable.

Views| Nightbreeze is determined to bring the Clan back to life. Although he wouldn't mind being a leader, he is not hungry for power. Nightbreeze would trust almost anyone who was put in charge, but he would think twice about cats he knew that really wanted power.

Kin| Goldenpelt - mother, Darkfur - father, Mudkit - brother, all deceased

History| Goldenpelt had a litter of three kits - one stillborn she-cat, and two toms. Darkfur named them Nightkit and Mudkit. When they were old enough to be trained, Darkfur trained them for one whole dark season. Along with training, the kits received regular lectures on how great a Clan would be. Both kits took it all in with wide eyes. They would repeat to each other how RiverClan had flourished.

Nightkit was sure that great things would happen in his lifetime. He had dreams of the Clan coming back together. His father as leader. His mother as deputy. He had seen his parents fight rats and cats alike, and while he was scared each time they were in battle, after they were victorious, he became more sure that his parents were the best.

Then, one day when the family was on a rat hunt, his hopes were shattered. Mudkit made several clumsy attacks, giving the rat an opportunity to seriously wound him. In an effort to defend Mudkit from further attacks, Darkfur and Goldenpelt had to do several risky maneuvers. While they and Nightkit defeated the rat, both of his parents got bitten. It was all in vain, though - Mudkit died anyways.

Before she died, Goldenpelt gave Nightkit his warrior name. It was Nightbreeze, for his lively personality - Nightbreeze had been cheerful, optimistic and very social from his kit days. As she died, he made a vow to bring the Clan back.

But the death of his parents soured his mood. Bitter and grieving, he was no longer the lively kit he had been. The only thing that tied him to the world was his promise to bring the Clan back to life.

So after the darkest season in his entire life, he began to talk and debate and socialize. He was determined to make his kithood dreams come true, or at least one aspect of them.

He is not quite as lively or dreamy as he was as a kit, but his good moods come more often now. His 'darkest hour' has passed.

And he is still determined to bring the Clan back, in honor of his parents.

[Ten]

"Name| Nightbreeze"
"Darkstone - father"
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Stony and breezy personalities sound like opposites to me.
I'm no expert, but I would think that a son would try to be like his father.
If not, I'd expect a strong reason for things being otherwise.


"Then, when the family was on a rat hunt, things went wrong. Nightkit and his brother managed to kill the rat, but not before Darkstone, Goldenpelt, and Mudkit had been bitten."
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How did things manage to go that wrong? Is one of the cats at fault?


"Nightbreeze, for his lively personality"
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How is he lively?

[Gosh]

I think I've fixed everything? ;3

[Ten]

"Nightbreeze supports the idea of a Clan one hundred percent."
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Why?


"It was Nightbreeze, for his lively personality - Nightbreeze had been cheerful, optimistic and very social from his kit days."
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This sounds odd in contrast to the death scene. Also, if you're going to label him with any adjectives like that, I'd like for you to show him behaving that way rather than telling me that's just how it is.

[Gosh]

"Why?"

I put in something about how he received lectures about the goodness of Clanhood in there.

"This sounds odd in contrast to the death scene. Also, if you're going to label him with any adjectives like that, I'd like for you to show him behaving that way rather than telling me that's just how it is."

I adjusted it to make it sound less odd, I hope. I'll think of a way to show his cheerfulness, I suppose.

[Ten]

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