Thistle
Apprentice
noisy cricket {1}[M:0]
woah, so liek hai. 8D%\7\%
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Post by Thistle on Mar 22, 2009 14:25:48 GMT -5
She roams around the enclosure meeting other cats when she's not hunting.
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Post by Ten on Mar 22, 2009 17:18:47 GMT -5
"He didn't tolerate any nonsense, so she got into trouble often, mainly due to her bold, cheeky attitude, and because she challenged him a lot, saying that this was the right way and that was not.
He did continue to mentor her because at that time Littlenose was sick and asked him to. Shadestream acted differently whenever her father was around, but only to avoid his punishments."
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You make it sound like an ongoing problem and then all of the sudden you imply it stopped.
When was the stop?
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Thistle
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noisy cricket {1}[M:0]
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Post by Thistle on Mar 28, 2009 18:13:13 GMT -5
You make it sound like an ongoing problem and then all of the sudden you imply it stopped.
When was the stop?
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After her mother became sick.
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Post by Ten on Mar 29, 2009 16:00:53 GMT -5
"After her mother became sick."
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Could you clarify that in the bio? It doesn't say she got sick. It says she had been sick, making it seem as though she had been sick for a while, like since the beginning of training.
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Thistle
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noisy cricket {1}[M:0]
woah, so liek hai. 8D%\7\%
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Post by Thistle on Apr 6, 2009 4:03:55 GMT -5
Done.
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Post by Ten on Apr 6, 2009 17:08:56 GMT -5
"He did continue to mentor her because at that time Littlenose was sick and asked him to. Shadestream stopped acting the way she does after her mother got sick, but only to avoid his punishments."
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It still sounds like an ongoing thing.
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Thistle
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noisy cricket {1}[M:0]
woah, so liek hai. 8D%\7\%
Posts: 358
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Post by Thistle on Apr 16, 2009 23:35:10 GMT -5
I changed the history. Better now?
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