Thistle
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Post by Thistle on Mar 7, 2009 2:08:30 GMT -5
I modifed the bio.
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Post by Ten on Mar 7, 2009 8:36:31 GMT -5
"He didn't tolerate any nonsense, so she got into trouble often, mainly due to her bold, cheeky attitude, and because she challenged him a lot, saying that this was the right way to hunt and that was not."
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This is saying that he didn't tolerate any nonsense, so she gave him nonsense.
"But gradually, her punishments became fewer and fewer since her father corrected her rather harshly, and then stopped all together."
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Her father punished her less because he corrected her?
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Thistle
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Post by Thistle on Mar 7, 2009 21:56:42 GMT -5
This is saying that he didn't tolerate any nonsense, so she gave him nonsense.
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How about
'She got into trouble often because her father didn't tolerate any nonsense, mainly due to her bold, cheeky attitude and because she challenged him a lot, saying that this was the right way to hunt and that was not.'
Her father punished her less because he corrected her?
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He corrected her so she stopped getting in trouble.
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Post by Ten on Mar 7, 2009 22:15:09 GMT -5
"She got into trouble often because her father didn't tolerate any nonsense"
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Now wouldn't continuing to mentor her be tolerating it?
And if he wasn't tolerating it, then the problem wouldn't persist, would it?
"He corrected her so she stopped getting in trouble."
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He corrected her so she stopped making the mistake?
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Thistle
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Post by Thistle on Mar 7, 2009 22:45:33 GMT -5
Now wouldn't continuing to mentor her be tolerating it?
And if he wasn't tolerating it, then the problem wouldn't persist, would it?
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So how should I fix it?
He corrected her so she stopped making the mistake?
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Yes.
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Post by Ten on Mar 7, 2009 22:48:39 GMT -5
"So how should I fix it?"
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The syntax, or the character?
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Thistle
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Post by Thistle on Mar 8, 2009 3:55:14 GMT -5
The syntax, or the character?
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Either one.
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Post by Ten on Mar 8, 2009 13:46:50 GMT -5
You're capable of doing this yourself.
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Thistle
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Post by Thistle on Mar 10, 2009 2:08:52 GMT -5
Now wouldn't continuing to mentor her be tolerating it?
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Her mother was ill at that time, so Mudfang had to continue to mentor her.
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Post by Ten on Mar 10, 2009 18:07:21 GMT -5
"Mudfang had to continue to mentor her."
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He doesn't have to do anything.
He can ditch her and leaving her alone to die. He can beat the living daylights out of her until she behaves.
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