Thistle
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noisy cricket {1}[M:0]
woah, so liek hai. 8D%\7\%
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Post by Thistle on Feb 28, 2009 6:45:28 GMT -5
So if he was harsh and all that, why didn't he straighten her out?
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He did.
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Post by Ten on Feb 28, 2009 8:13:54 GMT -5
"He did."
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Then she wouldn't be so sassy after all, now, would she?
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Thistle
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Post by Thistle on Feb 28, 2009 22:22:23 GMT -5
Then she wouldn't be so sassy after all, now, would she?
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After a few punishments, she stopped acting like that in front of her parents. But she still is when they're not around.
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Post by Ten on Feb 28, 2009 23:05:06 GMT -5
"she stopped acting like that in front of her parents"
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What about her mother?
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Thistle
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Post by Thistle on Mar 1, 2009 1:23:32 GMT -5
What about her mother?
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She acts stubborn and all, because her mother wasn't known to give punishments much so she thought that she could do whatever she wanted.
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Post by Ten on Mar 1, 2009 16:41:03 GMT -5
No, I mean, you said she stopped acting like that in front of her parents.
Do you mean both her parents, or just her father, since her mother didn't discipline her?
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Thistle
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Post by Thistle on Mar 4, 2009 3:47:55 GMT -5
Just her father.
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Post by Ten on Mar 4, 2009 19:14:33 GMT -5
"because her arrogant personality makes her think that if there was any leader at all she would be ordered around all the time,"
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Her personality doesn't make her think that.
"so she got into trouble often,"
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How could it be often if he put an end to it?
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Thistle
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Post by Thistle on Mar 5, 2009 6:26:52 GMT -5
Her personality doesn't make her think that.
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Then should I take it out?
How could it be often if he put an end to it?
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*goes to fix it* Is it better now?
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Post by Ten on Mar 5, 2009 17:48:39 GMT -5
"Then should I take it out?"
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That, or rephrase it.
"But gradually, her punishments became fewer and fewer since her father corrected her rather harshly."
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This sentence sounds contradictory.
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