Solaris

[solaris]

Name|

Solaris

Gender|

She cat

Physical Description|

Solaris, or Sol for short, is a mainly black cat with a small amount of orange and white to her fur. Her eyes, a golden color, are like gold orbs that radiate when she is happy. Sol is very sleek and well kept. Her fur coat is very well groomed, except for the patches of clumped fur. Her body shows her agile characteristics very well. She has a missing piece of one ear and the other has a nick in it.

Views|

She is very flexible in her views. She accepts most for what, or who they are. She would rather be a leader than a follower. She is very demanding and high maintenance for a feral cat. She is very outgoing and bold. She is crud and has a hard time holding her tongue. She is all for gay love and is lesbian for the record.

Kin|

Unknown family. Dead.

Adopted Mother: Nursed until 6 moons. Never gave a name to Sol, only mom or mother.

Adopted Father: None.

History|

Solaris, a beautiful tortie, was born to two loners. She was left to fend for herself, rather died on her own, and was never looked for by her biological parents. Her biological parents knew she was the runt and they didn't want to bear the heartache of losing their only kit. One loner, that seemed to have lost her kits, took care of the unnamed kit. "Kit", as her adopted mother called her, never cared for the kit, but didn't want to let it die. As soon as Solaris was apprentice aged, she went on her own. She learned from different loners that had given her a bit of wisdom as she traveled. Her mother, or rather adopted mother, pushed her away and onto her paws. The kit, still unnamed at the time, couldn't figure out what was wrong with her that made cats push her away. She went on her own and demanded that she find a name and a place for herself.

Solar, a name she had heard wandering, struck a nerve with her. She had heard it during the mention of a solar eclipse. She loved the name. Solar. Yet, the name Solar didn't have a good enough ring to it. Adding "is" to the end of Solar, made Solaris. She loved that name and knew her nickname would come to be Sol. Solaris enjoyed that name. It made her feel like she had something to live for.

Picture|

None Included. If needed, I will provide one.

[Ten]

Hello, Solaris. Welcome to Starless!
Did you read the name rules? If you think you have a reason for an exception, I'll hear you out, but I want to make sure you've read them first.


"Her fur coat is very well groomed, except for the patches of missing fur along her tail."
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Missing... fur?
Is something preventing it from growing back?


"She is very flexible in her views."
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What do you mean?


"She is very demanding and high maintenance for a outdoor, wild cat."
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How so?


"She is all for "happy" love and is "happy" for the record."
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What do you--
Oh.
Oh!
You don't have to use euphemisms.
We're not afraid of the word gay. Or lesbian, or homosexual, or however you want to put it.
...I guess if you'd rather put it as happy, that works too, I guess, but it's not as clear.


"Sol is the one to be the masculine figure in a relationship."
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Some of these things aren't views. The views section can be a way to reveal personality, but it's not the same thing as a personality section.


"Unknown family."
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Not unknown to you.
Just a note as to whether her biological family is dead or alive will suffice.


"Solaris, a beautiful torbie"
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You mean calico?
Tobies, which differ from torties, have tabby stripes.
Also, beautiful is your own subjective judgement. If you want her to be beautiful, instead of telling others to think that, describe the characteristics she has that you think are beautiful without having to label them as such (and this would go in the physical description, of course).


"She was left to fend for herself,"
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Why?


" 'Kit', as her adopted mother called her, never cared for the kit, but didn't want to let it die."
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...Kit never cared for the kit?


"As soon as Solaris was apprentice aged, she went on her own."
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Who did she learn from?


"StarClan, a myth in her eyes,"
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No. StarClan is no longer spoke of.


"Solar, a name she had heard wandering,"
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When would any of the cats be saying 'solar'?
Solar eclipse? Solar winds?

[solaris]

I've corrected most of them for more explanations.

The name thing is because no one cared for her. She named herself for a reason.

I've read the rules twice.

[Ten]

I'd like it if you could answer to each question in your reply posts, just to make it a little more convenient, so I don't have to reread the whole bio each time. This is a discussion, not just a list of things to fix. ;3


"Her fur coat is very well groomed, except for the patches of clumped fur."
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Why would the fur be clumped, except for poor grooming?
Is she long-haired?


"Her body shows her agile characteristics very well."
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I suppose this means... something like she's slender and sleek, right?
Agile isn't a body type, so I can't tell if you're talking about how she looks or how she moves.


"She is very flexible in her views."
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But what are her views? Does she want a Clan?


"She accepts most for what, or who they are."
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What kinds of cats are the exceptions?


"She is very demanding and high maintenance for a feral cat. She is very outgoing and bold. She is crud and has a hard time holding her tongue."
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I'm thinking these aren't views either.
Instead of describing her as such, you can show her acting like this in her History.


"She was left to fend for herself, rather died on her own,"
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This grammar is a little confusing, making is sound like she died.


"Her biological parents knew she was the runt and they didn't want to bear the heartache of losing their only kit."
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Implying they kept the rest of the litter?
So... they didn't want to lose her, so they lost her?
If she's going to be a runt, you should put that in her physical description. I don't remember anything there about her being extra small.


" 'Kit', as her adopted mother called her, never cared for the kit,"
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This doesn't make sense.


"She learned from different loners that had given her a bit of wisdom as she traveled."
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She just went up to random strangers for lessons?


"The kit, still unnamed at the time, couldn't figure out what was wrong with her that made cats push her away."
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I can't figure out why she didn't give her a name.


"She had heard it during the mention of a solar eclipse."
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...Really?


"The name thing is because no one cared for her."
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If nobody cared for her, she'd be dead.
Evidently she had lots of help in her live, from her mother to her tutors.
They must have called her something.

[solaris]

She has a genetic disorder that causes her fur to clump.

In the way she walks, she shows her agile nature. Her body is sleek and slender. She has powerful legs and a strong back.

She doesn't want a clan. In fact, she likes to be by herself.

Cats that have no poise is something she can't stand. She doesn't like followers.

I meant that she was left to die rather than died. Sorry, typo on my part.

She was a runt, but had no siblings. So, they only thought she was a runt, considering her small size in the beginning. She isn't really a runt. She is normal. Her parents didn't want the heartache. They dumped her out on her own because it was their incoherent thinking that told them to get rid of the kit to avoid getting attached to it.

Her adopted mother called her kit. Her adopted mother didn't like getting attached to others. She had gotten hurt by her love and her miscarriage.

She actually went up to the loners to fight. Due to inexperience, cats would give her tidbits of advice.

She didn't have a name because she was never called anything but kit for her lifetime, even the loners that gave her advice. They asked her name and she would say "kit."

Sure. Really. I guess cause cats can be like "yo, look at the solar eclipse." *shrugs*

They did. Kit.

[Ten]

"She has a genetic disorder that causes her fur to clump."
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Oh? I haven't heard of this. What's it called?


"In the way she walks, she shows her agile nature. Her body is sleek and slender. She has powerful legs and a strong back.
She doesn't want a clan. In fact, she likes to be by herself."
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mmkay. Those are things to include.


"Cats that have no poise is something she can't stand. She doesn't like followers."
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Doesn't like followers? That's odd, considering she likes to lead. She can't lead leaders; they'd just clash.


"She was a runt, but had no siblings. So, they only thought she was a runt, considering her small size in the beginning. She isn't really a runt. She is normal. Her parents didn't want the heartache. They dumped her out on her own because it was their incoherent thinking that told them to get rid of the kit to avoid getting attached to it."
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Incoherent indeed. How about something that makes a little more sense? They could have been killed, for example.


"Her adopted mother didn't like getting attached to others."
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Yet she adopted a kit to nurse and raise.
I don't believe she could avoid any attachment that way.


"She actually went up to the loners to fight."
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She's that aggressive?
Or do you mean she requested a lesson from them?


"Due to inexperience, cats would give her tidbits of advice."
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The world has been incredibly benevolent to her.


"They asked her name and she would say 'kit.'"
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Well then, that was her name. She didn't need to name herself.
Just Kit, though? Her mother couldn't manage to think of an adjective?


"I guess cause cats can be like 'yo, look at the solar eclipse.'"
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None of them would be that blaise about it. That would have been a momentous event, creating panic and confusion, and would have had an impact on the plot. But it didn't, so it couldn't have happened. You can't interject things like that at random.

[solaris]

It isn't like clumped clumped. It is more like grimy and gross. So, yeah.

She doesn't like stupid followers, if that makes sense.

Umm..they died in a loner fight within their backyard. (Just making that up as I go.)

Her adopted mother just took care of her and sent her off. She had no really reason to bond with anyone.

She isn't aggressive. She wants to learn.

Yes.

She didn't want the name kit to stick with her. Her mother was a bit...on the...loopy side.

I am a very random person. Half the time, I don't even know what I am saying. -_- It is sad really.

[Cloud]

Hello, Solaris! I am Cloudie.

Good to see you back.

I know you've explained your reasons for Solaris's name, but...I just really don't think it'd work. xD Trust me, I was one of the first to ask why there were no one-word names. So, she's a calico but mostly black?

I'd recommend Cricket, Black, Shadow, Night, or Shade as a prefix. Technically, the latter four are taken, but their players have been inactive for a long time so I think they're safe to use.

You mention that she's flexible in views, but what exactly are those? Does she want the Clan to reform? She seems more like a Clanner because you say she's more of a leader than a follower.

....wait, within their backyard? There are no backyards around. xD It's all the enclosure.

"She was left to fend for herself, rather died on her own, and was never looked for by her biological parents. Her biological parents knew she was the runt and they didn't want to bear the heartache of losing their only kit."

Wait, I'm confused. You say she was left to die, but her parents didn't want to lose her. Which is it?

I have a few suggestions if you want the history to be similar to what it is now, excluding the stuff about her name:

How about she was born, but her parents died shortly after from illness, and possibly one of them had a nursing relation who took her in? Either the parents (if they did live that long) or the relation did give her a name, but then they could have gotten rid of her like you said in her history because they felt like she and their kits together were too much work, or some other reason.

If so, you should add what the cat who raised her taught her, whether to be a Clanner or a con.

I'm sure this is probably difficult, but I have faith that you can do it. ;3

[Ten]

"It isn't like clumped clumped. It is more like grimy and gross. So, yeah."
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The genetic disorder. What's the name of it?


"She doesn't like stupid followers, if that makes sense."
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Alright, as long as you clarify that.


"Umm..they died in a loner fight within their backyard."
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Cloud has pointed out the backyard thing, but also, what was the fight about?


"Her adopted mother just took care of her and sent her off. She had no really reason to bond with anyone."
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She took care of her. She can't nurse a kitten at her belly for weeks and then just kick her away and ignore her.


"She isn't aggressive. She wants to learn."
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Then that isn't going up to them to fight; that's going up and requesting lessons.


"She didn't want the name kit to stick with her."
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Then she should have named her something else.
What'd she rename her?


"I am a very random person. Half the time, I don't even know what I am saying. -_- It is sad really."
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No, I don't mean like that. You're not allowed to manipulate the plot and create tremendous events without my permission.



Hello again, Cloud. Glad you swung by.

"I'd recommend Cricket, Black, Shadow, Night, or Shade as a prefix. Technically, the latter four are taken, but their players have been inactive for a long time so I think they're safe to use."
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hmmm, I should go and delete some inactive scribes, shouldn't I?