Redstream

[Darky [Megan]]

Roleplayer| Darky
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Name| Redstream

Gender| She-cat

Physical Description| This cat moves gracefully, with a calculated fluidity and her head held high. Redstream has green eyes. She is an orangey-red tabby, with white on her paws, underbelly and tail-tip. Her ears are a bit longer than most cats.

Views| Redstream would prefer the life of a proper clan warrior, instead of the disorganized hunting groups and having only rats and crickets to eat. She doesn’t really care who or what kind of person the leader is, so as long as they are able to promote teamwork and collaboration amongst the cats in an agreeable fashion and keep them off starvation.

She fancies herself in positions of considerable leadership or power, but doesn't often think of the hard work that comes along with it. As it is, lacking very good hunting skills, she would most likely be a simple clan member, but try hard to impress her superiors.

Kin| Her parents have passed away. Her brother is Orangestorm.

History| Redstream was born as the third in a litter of four kits during dawn, hence her prefix. Out of these four, only she and her brother survived birth and made it through weaning before their mother succumbed to a case of ringworm. Their father followed soon after, when he lost to particularly bloody fight. He had been observing a few large cats hunting and offered a rather arrogant but good-intentioned spot of advice which had been taken in a very wrong way.

While she was still alive, Redstream’s mother taught her kits to always carry the illusion of being proud, for she believed that such a feat would be praised by their fellow felines and give others a good impression. Redstream accepted her mother’s teaching willingly, but her brother preferred to follow their father, who took a more realistic approach at earning cat's praise with sturdy combat and leadership skills. From her mother's example, Redstream puts great stock by maintaining other cats' good opinions of her and makes it a priority, even if it sometimes clashes with her true nature or views. Redstream learned of how to hunt from her mother, while her brother learned from their father, and was deeply shaken when news of her mother’s death reached her.

Perhaps out for respect for her departed mother, Redstream is usually seen projecting an outward show of unwavering pride and confidence, wearing an everlastingly smug expression on her face. She takes care in the way she walks, being sure of seeming fluid and graceful, which is how she got her warrior suffix. Those who see this behaviour as it is, a pretentious shell, are very few in number. This act of never seeming weak or upset has grown on Redstream and makes it hard for her to confide in others.

Her ties with her brother are not strong. Orangestorm usually greets her with a cold shoulder and Redstream is not surprised at his behaviour. She makes sure to show him that she is completely fine about his treatment, but inwardly she feels very hurt and is sour at the way her brother ignores her.

Picture| None.

[Ten]

"She has a rather fluffy, long tail, though her main pelt is short."
So she has two different fur lengths?

"She believes that having a clan is the answer to breaking free from the imprisonment of the walls and being able to roam near the river once again;"
So she's insane?

"was born as the third in a litter of four kits, during dawn,"
Time of day is irrelevant to naming.

"Their father followed soon after, when he lost to particularly bloody fight over something that remains unknown to his kits."
So what was it?

"Dawnstream accepted her mother’s teaching willingly, but her brother preferred to follow their father."
What did he teach that was different from that?

"warrior –suffix." < no hyphen

"that performance disallows her from letting herself show almost any other emotion,"
That sounds awkward. Not the sentence, I mean. Her showing only one emotion in reaction to anything sounds awkward.

[Darky [Megan]]

"So she has two different fur lengths?"
Hmm, I knew I wouldn't be able to slip past that. Changed.

"So she's insane?"
Not really. She just feels trapped and shut off from the outside world (more than most cats).

"Time of day is irrelevant to naming."
Guess I'll be renaming her then. How does Sunstream sound, for an orangey-red coat?

"So what was it?"
"What did he teach that was different from that?"
Added in.

""warrior –suffix." < no hyphen"
Hyphen gone.

"That sounds awkward. Not the sentence, I mean. Her showing only one emotion in reaction to anything sounds awkward."
Well, there is the word 'almost' in that sentence you quoted, but I agree with the awkwardness. I've edited the sentence. =)

[Ten]

"Sunstream"
Did you read the name rules?

"Not really."
Does she want to escape or think it's possible?
If so, she's insane.

"Their father followed soon after, when he lost to particularly bloody fight with a few large cats he had accidentally provoked."
How?

"their father, who took a more realistic approach at earning cat's praise"
Such as?

[Darky [Megan]]

"Did you read the name rules?"
Yes, I did. D: I'm sorry about that, changing her name ...
Originally I decided to rename her Redstream, but it sounded a little odd.

"Does she want to escape or think it's possible?
If so, she's insane."
Insane she is, then, because she would like to escape.

"How?"
Added in.

"Such as?"
Clarified. ^^

[Ten]

"Your Name|"
Did you see the Announcement?

"Their father followed soon after, when he lost to particularly bloody fight with a few large cats he had accidentally provoked with an unintended insult to their hunting skills."
X2 Now this sentence is huge.
How would he insult them without meaning to?

[Darky [Megan]]

"Did you see the Announcement?"
Nope, I didn't. D: -changes-

"X2 Now this sentence is huge.
How would he insult them without meaning to?"
Ack, it is long. Should I break it up into two sentences?
I would think he might've been trying to offer a spot of advice while watching them hunting, but they just took it the wrong way.

[Ten]

"Should I break it up into two sentences?"
Sounds good.

"trying to offer a spot of advice"
Ah. Include that, then.

[Darky [Megan]]

Done and done. 8]