Brightfur

[Spot]

"Their freedom"
The cats in the edifice.

"Her freedom"
The freedom that she wants to have, as she wants to escape (making cats believe she is crazy)

"has been caged too long"
has been enclosed too long. Basically, she wants out of the edifice.

I removed it from by biography, if you didn't get what I meant.

"-blush-"
Ten, you are awesome. You deserve it :3

[Ten]

"has been enclosed too long."
What I meant was, I don't see how the lack of bondage can be in bondage.
Well, whatever.

"Ten, you are awesome."
-blush-
Cut that out before my ego gets any bigger.

"Brightfur wants to lead..."
"But, Brightfur is also a follower."
You contradict yourself. Clarify?

"...in the edifice, but wishes for..." < no comma

Also, don't use commas after "but".

[Spot]

Brightfur wants to be a leader, but she is also capable of accepting advice and being a follower. So, for example in warrior's term, she'd be quite happy as a deputy; leading the cats below her rank, but at the same time having someone that can give her advice.