Speckledclaw

[Darky [Megan]]

I still don't understand the 'solid or tabby' thing. >.<
But the other issue I've settled.

Well then, if you're fine with offering some critique, drop me a PM. ^_^
Did that go well? =/

EDIT:

I made a pretty big addition to Speckledclaw's history.
I also made two new submissions, please take a look. ^^

[Ten]

"I still don't understand the 'solid or tabby' thing. >.<"
You know what a tabby is, right?

"Did that go well? =/"
Nope.

Edit:

"The tom, whose name was Snowfoot, was in dire need of help from a queen who would be able to supply his little sister (Daintypaw) milk. Speckledclaw had had a daughter who died shortly after birth, but nonetheless Speckledclaw was able to supply the milk that the little kit needed."

So this happened soon after her daughters birth?
What was the nature of her relationship with the father?

"To be Daintypaw's mentor." < not a complete sentence
You could add a colon before it and it'd work.

"no fighting experience, and he was" < no comma
"with the young cat, and has" < no comma

I hope you won't do too much interacting with yourself due to this bond between your characters. It would be more profitable to the role play if you had characters that avoided each other; I think you'd enjoy it more to have your characters bond with other people's characters, not your own.

[Darky [Megan]]

Certainly I know what a tabby is. But what is a solid?
D: I see.

I cut out that part, because, as you stated in another bio, Daintypaw had already been weaned. So Speckledclaw hasn't had a mate yet.

Colon added.

I considered that. I had to find a way to make Daintypaw and Snowfoot's profiles work, though. Plus I was half-asleep by the time I had finished, and I didn't want to rewrite their histories.
These three characters might have a close relationship, but it doesn't necessarily mean that they'll be hanging around each other all the time.

[Ten]

"But what is a solid?"
...I don't know how to explain this. Just make her a tabby.

"it doesn't necessarily mean that they'll be hanging around each other all the time." That's what you made it sound like.
I still want to remind you that it'd work better to have characters that dislike each other.

"Snowfoot requested one more thing from her; to be Daintypaw's mentor."
That's a semicolon, not a colon.

[Darky [Megan]]

"...I don't know how to explain this. Just make her a tabby."
I don't want to offend anyone, but you seem to be thinking that there are only two main categories of pelts - solid and tabby. Isn't it clear enough that Speckledclaw is simply a white cat with brown spots?

"I still want to remind you that it'd work better to have characters that dislike each other."
Perhaps it would be better then, for me to scrap up Daintypaw and Snowpelt and create two new characters? I came up with a few ideas before sleeping, and I've been itching to try them out. =3

"That's a semicolon, not a colon."
Few weeks into the holidays and I've already begun forgetting punctuation names. Sorry! -changes-

[Ten]

"I don't want to offend anyone, but you seem to be thinking that there are only two main categories of pelts - solid and tabby."
Yes and no.

"Isn't it clear enough that Speckledclaw is simply a white cat with brown spots?"
Nope. She's a brown cat with white markings (I'm using the technical genetic terms here). That means she has a base coat of brown. Is that brown solid or tabby?

"Perhaps it would be better then, for me to scrap up Daintypaw and Snowpelt and create two new characters?"
I deleted them for you (so you'll need to remove them from her history). You're welcome to make more, though.

[Darky [Megan]]

"Nope. She's a brown cat with white markings (I'm using the technical genetic terms here).
That means she has a base coat of brown. Is that brown solid or tabby?"
I'll make that brown a tabby, since I have no idea how to use the 'solid' in her description.

"I deleted them for you (so you'll need to remove them from her history). You're welcome to make more, though. "
Thanks, I'll do that. =)

[Ten]

"I'll make that brown a tabby,"
Excellent.

"Her dirty pelt of mud-brown, covered with white specks of fur,"
Specks? I thought she was spotted.

[Darky [Megan]]

"Specks? I thought she was spotted."
Aight-o, I've changed that. =)

[Darky [Megan]]

Fianlly! 83
-does a jig-